Critique This is holding the fun and spritely Flirt Fest Blogfest! Don't forget to visit all the other blogs for hours of flirting fun!This is an excerpt, page 17 to be exact, from my Eros YA Romance Novel. Cupid has just been evicted from Mt. Olympus by the vindictive goddess of love, Aphrodite. His mom. He is to fend for himself. Seems to me like he's getting along famously, don't you think? But I'll let you be the judge!
“I like it when girls are soft. When they are breathless.”
She shrugged and dropped her face until her hair covered her eyes.
“Here, let me show you.”
Angie shrugged again and rolled her lips between her teeth. What an idiot she was. Of course it would be too wonderful to be real to have some gorgeous Greek hunk to want her. Even as a simple friend.
The cushion beside her depressed and she lost her balance with a shriek.
She gazed up into an endless pool of ocean green framed by dark cattail lashes. His smooth and flawless skin screamed out to her. His long hair soft wisps around his face.
“W-what?” she stammered.
Eros pressed a finger to her lips as he glided his thumb over the corner of her mouth. His hands felt soft and feathery against her face. His breath a soft puff of heavenly breeze.
Angie forgot how to breathe. She forgot how to kiss. She even forgot how to close her eyes. Too stunned to do so, she watched Eros with rapt fascination as his long lashes swept shut, the delicious corner of his mouth visible to her greedy stare.
She heard Eros smile.
“Soft. Breathless. Can you feel yourself?”
“Huh?”
Eros pulled away, his hands tangling in her hair. “I like it when girls listen to my touch.” He ran his knuckles across her cheekbone. Angie leaned into his caress. “I like it when girls listen to my breath.” He hovered over her ear and she shuddered with pleasure. “I like it when girls listen to my kiss . . .” He brushed his lips across her cheek until he met the corner of her mouth.
Angie squeaked when Eros pulled away, replaced by a sudden cruel cold whoosh.
She blinked many times and found him sitting across from her, his eyes half-closed as he watched her.
“Why did you stop?”
“I only wanted to show you what I like.”
“You did?” Angie sighed, trying so hard to still her wild heart. “So you liked it?” She couldn’t help how he could like her.
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