TIPS ON WRITING:
After having written for over 20 years, I have gathered quite the experience on writing. As passionate as I am about it, I'd be ungrateful by not sharing what I've learned--one step at a time.
So here I go!
Emotions: Everyone experiences these. If you cut this out of your writing, it leaves your story lifeless and boring:
I walked down the hallway, listening for any sounds in the other rooms. No, they came from my room. I opened my door. I had no doubt that I looked surprised when I saw her.
This is how I instill emotion:
I marched down the hallway, listening for any sounds in the other rooms. No, they came from my room. I busted through my door and my blood seemed to explode from my body. I had no doubt that my eyes were huge and my mouth hung low when I saw her.*
I've used powerful words (marched, busted, blood, explode, hung), body language (eyes huge, mouth hanging, marching, busting through door), physical sensation (blood seemed to explode), and wrapped it up using internalization.
A few research links to build your emotional bible:
*excerpt from Kursed, YA Paranormal Romance