How do your sentences march?
Cool waves of sentiments that soothe the reader into knowing what your MC is thinking, nothing alarming, but relaxing crests of foam?
Confusing strings that lead you along without breath--making you believe that something is around the corner that will lunge out at you at any moment without any show of mercy so you can not take a single breath in between?
Short and choppy? What? Is it in the dark? Is it waiting? Waiting to . . . eat you?
Does it lack any type of rhythm, making it a tongue tripper--maybe--for the reader so he or she has to pause, reread, and think about how it was meant to be read, because of how it didn't sound right. No wait, maybe, no, never mind. I got lost. ;)
How do you accent your sentences?
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